How best to show alternative words for singer?

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How best to show alternative words for singer?

Post by David Ward » 25 Jun 2018, 20:21

Is it clear, without further indication, that the lower line (‘2nd verse’ as it were) of lyrics is an alternative in case repetitions of ‘me’ might be uncomfortable for the voice?

Voice is dramatic mezzo, tempo is dotted crotchet = 96. In theory, all those repetitions of ‘me’ might have the best dramatic effect, but I feel they could be awkward and uncomfortable to sing.
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Re: How best to show alternative words for singer?

Post by John Ruggero » 25 Jun 2018, 22:50

"or:" or "ossia:" in italics placed under the "and"?

I may have mentioned this before, David. Your dashed slurs might be more visible and attractive with different settings. I am using 6 EVPUs or .25 spaces for both the dash and the space these days.
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Re: How best to show alternative words for singer?

Post by benwiggy » 26 Jun 2018, 09:23

I'd use Italics, or an ossia. Possibly along with a footnote.

If I might advise: the EE vowel is certainly harder higher up the voice, without modification. Might you get the desired effect keeping "me" on the lower notes, so "no--w blames me, blames me, blames me, me".

As far as dashed slurs go, I found I got the best results using longer dashes and smaller gaps. (5pt and 3pt.) Also, a slur thickness of 2pt and a 0.1pt ending helps.

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Re: How best to show alternative words for singer?

Post by David Ward » 26 Jun 2018, 09:44

Thank you both for your responses.

Something like this?

I've used Ben's 5pt dashes with 3pt gaps for now, but haven't changed the thickness (yet), although I'm not sure whether it's the Finale default or something I'd modified. I may or may not use different settings for the vocal score (with the preparing of which I struggle at the best of times).

Yes, on reflection, repetitions of ‘blames me’ might be best: thank you for the suggestion.
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Re: How best to show alternative words for singer?

Post by David Ward » 27 Jun 2018, 08:25

A slight up-date: I think the or: is perhaps better placed like this. Any thoughts?
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Re: How best to show alternative words for singer?

Post by OCTO » 27 Jun 2018, 09:06

As benwiggy said above, I think that the ossia text should just go italic. In my opinion it is the clearest option.
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